Once upon a time there was a little girl named Lilly and a little boy named Jared . They were best friends. One day they went to Fun Land and went in a shop with lots of toys. They went in a lift. They pressed a button that had an x on it . When they got out of the lift it said candy Land. And the girl was dressed in a pink and white dress with flowers and the boy was dressed in a blue top and black pants. When they got out of the lift the little girl picked up a basket . There were lollies every where . They went to the first lolly shop . All the lollies were for free. The got turns . There were lolly pops, gumballs, pebbles and planes . When they had two baskets full of lollies they decided to go home and meet there another day. On the way home there was a water fall. They went around twice and shook hands and said "goodbye meet here tomorrow". Lilly went back to her cottage and Jared went back his house on the hill, where his mum was getting ready for tea. Lilly was tired and went to bed. They lived both happily ever after.
By Ella
That story is really cool.
ReplyDeleteGood job room 12 it is really cool
ReplyDeleteGreat Job Ella.I like how you described Jared and Lilly.I like the theme of CandyLand
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ReplyDeleteI love the description Ella. I loved how you described the Charachers.
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